Works In Progress

Plan for Reflective Portfolio & Constructive Criticism

  • Add more to introduction
  • develop examples and elaborate on them
  • talk about my process through the course and how I developed a confidence in writing in different modes of communication
  • talk about how science in communication is very multimodal and how this helped with my own multimodality

Reflective Portfolio Draft Introduction

At first, I was not quite sure I was going to enjoy my English class. The topic, science in communication, seemed strange and difficult to understand on my first day of class, but as my time in the course comes to a close, I truly believe that I have learned and successfully used all of the learning outcomes of the course. I worked on critical thinking and rhetoric throughout the semester, developed my process, and used many different medias and modes in my writing, expanding my tools and knowledge of writing in a multimodal mindset.

Values of Science Outcome

My Value sod Science project showed my critical thinking when I developed an interesting and complex argument surrounding my chosen texts, and my extensive process, since I did change the entirety of my argument after I made revisions and received peer review. I showed critical thinking when I discussed the reasoning behind Nim’s actions, as written here: “In other words, the reason Nim wanted to be held all the time is because he desired to feel the emotions associated with the hug. Similarly, Nim would also ask to hold other animals like cats which also create the same connection and promote the same addictive process in our minds and give Nim the emotions associated with care and love. Nim experienced all the emotions that primal and intellectual animals experience…” I developed my argument I made earlier in the project and pushed it farther so as to try and find reasoning in Nim’s actions. I showed the entirety of my process by doing several revisions and changing my entire argument and selected texts early on in the project.

Implications of Food Deserts

This research can help with real life research of obesity and how eating habits can be affected based on where you live. People in food deserts end up eating very different foods than those people who aren’t restricted from fresh food. People who live inside food deserts end up eating foods with more fat, more preservatives, and longer shelf lives than food eaten by those not in food deserts.

Differences in two websites

The two websites, although presenting similar information, present their facts in different ways. The article ‘Robot Replicates How Our Ancestors First Walked On Land’ is much shorter in length for one and seems less official as a result while the article ‘Robot Helps Study How First Land Animals Moved 360 Million Years Ago’ digs deep into the facts and is much longer, thus giving it a sense of authority. The first article also has two still pictures that the second does not. The first article is meant to inform you but not go into too much detail. The second article goes into detail about various aspects of the robot and the process of the building and designing of the robot.

Peer Evaluation of Spinning Science Project

1)

https://louis3187.wordpress.com/2016/09/12/intro-to-photo-essay/

Rhetorical Awareness – Developing

Stance – Competent

Development of Ideas – Competent

Organization – Competent

Conventions – Developing

Design for Medium – Mature

https://jorsandersblog.wordpress.com/spinning-science-project/

Rhetorical Awareness – Competent

Stance – Competent

Development of Ideas – Mature

Organization – Mature

Conventions – Mature

Design for Medium – Mature

https://bcjbrandon.wordpress.com/spinning-science-orkin-ad/

Rhetorical Awareness – Competent

Stance – Competent

Development of Ideas – Competent

Organization – Competent

Conventions – Competent

Design for Medium – Mature

2)

After seeing my peers’ reviews and that of my own, I  believe I have started off fairly well. The tone of my essay was different from theirs which they liked, and they thought it was well written. They also commented on the amount of detail I went into such a simple looking ad.

3)

Should I revise my Spinning Science project, I would attempt to clean up my writing to sound better. There are a few sentences that could be adjusted to sound more natural, and there are also a few points I make that could have stronger support I feel. Other than that, I feel that I have answered the questions posed by the project, and I think I have done fairly well in using the photo essay genre.

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